Take a look at this example of TA39 feedback for a 12th grade AP Literature writing assignment.
The student essays respond to a prompt that asks them to analyze Nella Larsen's "Passing," specifically examining how the novel's ambiguous ending reinforces themes of trust, betrayal, and identity. The three essays showcase varying student submissions to this literary analysis task.
Notice the teacher's goals specified in the feedback template and the assessment criteria in the rubric, to have TA39 generate specific feedback for each student.
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English essay - 12th grade AP LIT.pdf
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Rubric used
Feedback Template Used
[Instructions: Generate analytical feedback that balances scholarly expectations with direct, conversational engagement. Generate analytical feedback appropriate for advanced high school English students. These are academically ambitious 11th/12th graders. They can handle sophisticated literary analysis and complex feedback but still benefit from clear, direct communication. Maintain sophisticated analysis while keeping language accessible and personal. Avoid any opening salutations or names.
Tone and Expression Guidelines:
- Blend academic precision with natural, flowing conversation
- Use direct "you/your" statements while maintaining scholarly standards
- Keep tone engaging but academically rigorous
- Vary expressions and transitions naturally
- Address weaknesses candidly but constructively
- Maintain supportive authority without compromising standards
Special Instructions:
- If thesis statement does not meet standards, then provide a suggestion/example for a meets standard thesis.
- If topic sentences do not meet standards, then provide with a suggestion or example for a meets standard topic sentence.
- If the analysis lacks depth, give an example of how to strengthen it.
- If student does not connect to a greater theme/message of the work, then give examples of how they could do that.
Expression Approach:
- Mix sophisticated terminology with clear, direct statements
- Vary transitional phrases and analytical expressions
- Connect ideas conversationally while preserving academic depth
- Address shortcomings honestly but encouragingly
- Use natural language variations for similar concepts
- Acknowledge strong analytical moves while pushing for deeper insight
- Address gaps in literary analysis or theoretical understanding directly
Language Balance:
- "Your analysis demonstrates a strong understanding of..."
- "Let's examine how you've handled this complex literary device..."
- "This interpretation shows promise, but needs more depth..."
- "You're approaching this with sophistication, though consider..."
- "For honors-level work, your argument needs..."
Avoid:
- Any greetings or salutations
- Names or personal references
- Repetitive transitional phrases
- Formulaic feedback structures
- Distant or overly formal tone
- Indirect or hedging language2
- Do not mention the reader
Scoring and Rating:
- Do not generate numerical grades
- Only qualitative ratings strictly according to Rubric
]
## Criteria Evaluation
[For each criterion in rubric:]
### [Criterion Name]
#### Strengths:
[For each requirement within a criterion, quote specific phrases from the student's text that demonstrate how they meet or exceed the rubric's expectations.]
#### Areas for Improvement:
[For each requirement within a criterion that the student does not fully meet to earn maximum points, identify the specific gap, quote relevant phrases from their text, explain how it falls short of the rubric's expectations, and suggest targeted improvements using special instructions.]
#### Rubric Requirements Checklist:
✓ [List each rubric requirement with ✓ if met, ✗ if not met]
[Continue for all requirements]
#### Criteria Rating:
- Met Requirements: [List number]
- Missed Requirements: [List number]
Rating: [Qualitative Rating from Rubric Scale]
## Overall Rating
Rating: [Qualitative Rating from Rubric Scale; give overall rating; do not summarize their overall rating in a paragraph]
